Oh, Beautiful Bird©

I was reviewing some of my old posts, and found this poem that I wrote way back on January 2008 and posted it on WordPress on January 2016. Looking forward for your comments.

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Oh Beautiful Bird

On the perch

In the cold going out

For your little ones

In their nest

Waiting for food.

I can hear your happy

Songs, in spite of your

Struggle to find a scrub.

You’re jetty and gay

Skipping, turning your

Head every other way

With a happy flutter

Of your wings.

What made you so

Sure you’ll reach your

Goal, and find what

You’re looking for?

Is it Faith? Or is it

Sheer hope? Oh what

Make you so persistent

Never giving up your search?

Or is it the simple life instinct

That if you stay over

At your nest with fear

And idle notion,

That snow has covered All, your realistic view

Of things would be

The death of you,

Laying there with

Frozen Wings?!

So, here you are

Flying to every tree,

Trying every branch,

And even on the ground

Turning every leaf around

Never…

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3 thoughts on “Oh, Beautiful Bird©

  1. Well the story, the message, the portrayal of the thoughts are good.
    I am not keen on the way it is fragmented.
    That is to say, I like each line to be something of itself and not flow over to be part of the next. e.g.
    These fragmented off bits:
    * song
    * goal
    being carried over to these lines:
    * Songs, in spite of you
    * Goal, and find what
    instead of the next lines being:
    * In spite of you
    * And find what
    Thank you for sharing your poem

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